A dangerous Situation

We used our experience in the Mantle to create a tense piece of writing....

Franctic, Ella couldn't keep her scream in her mouth for any longer whilst panicking around the old, creepy Safari Park. So then she screamed. She screamed so loudly that some of the small rocks around her trembled. Then Ella picked-up something, which she didn't know what it was. So she bite it. It tasted horrible and it tasted dirty. Ella thought it was an sweet before, but she knew it wasn't an sweet any more. Then she smelt, it smelt like elephant muck. But then she saw a shadow and the shadow was moving. What ever the shadow was, Ella knew it wasn't good.Then Ella heard a sound. It sounded like it was coming from over where the lions used to sleep. The sound was getting closer and closer. Then she saw the shadow getting closer. Ella heard a howling noise coming towards her. It sounded like the howl was coming from a mighty, loud wolf, but then she saw what it was, it was the most ugliest thing she had ever seen in her whole life. It had a face like, a badgers face getting squashed by a car tire. Its fur was ruff like, a cat got scared when a car nearly hit it. Its eyes were red as bright, gleaming fire. Its teeth could bite through as it bite through a bit of cage (which was metal), and it bit right through the metal.